Strange feedback from employer - Didn't get the job
Now first of all, I do appreciate an employer giving feedback like this. They could have just ignored my request. However, I am confused about something. He said that my cover letter had a number of typos and incomplete sentences. Then he immediately proceeds to fail in the use of your vs. you're. I briefly thought about e-mailing him back to point out the irony of this, but I decided against it. Burnt bridges and all of that.Hi xxxx,
The interview did go well, however the successful candidate had a stronger technical background, specifically in Engineering. I would suggest you ensure that your answers are clear and concise, especially technical answers. For example, solving a hard drive problem, I was looking for basic step by step troubleshooting, which would be similar to a technical documentation format.
Also, just some advice on your resume and cover letter. Your cover letter had a number of typos and incomplete sentences. Your cover letter should be customized for the organization your applying to, and provide support for your candidacy. I would also suggest you reduce the length of your resume to either 1 or 2 pages at most.
Here is my cover letter for reference..
Now, after poring over this, I will say that I missed the conjunction between "position" and "Career" and use of the word "community" twice does read a bit awkwardly. However, this is not the same as 'a number of typos and incomplete sentences.' In fact, I can't find a single typo. Can someone help clarify what he meant here?May 4, 2012
I am interested in applying for the position of XX XXXXX. I found this position Career Central and am writing for your consideration.
With a background in applied science, IT, and technology solutions, I'm confident that my skill set matches what you're looking for. I'm a proud member of the Western community, a lifelong learner and someone who is heavily invested in my community.
I would love an opportunity to work as part of this project. I'd like to thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to hear from you soon.
Also, I highly doubt the candidate had a stronger technical background. If you saw my resume, you'd understand that I am already quite overqualified for this position (which pays $16hr. I've been paid more for a more senior role in a bigger company).. So, my hunch is that they hired a 2nd or 3rd year engineering student with retail experience, and pretty much lied to me. There's no way for me to confirm this however.
Finally, unless you want the font decreased so you can read it with a magnifying glass, there's no way I'm putting my resume down to 2 pages. I'd only be selling myself short and not painting the full picture. I have two pages for my education, work experience and certifications, and one page for my technical profile and volunteer experience with a couple lines dedicated to hobbies. I don't know how to cut this down without omitting things that I feel are important.
You might think that a 3-page resume must contain fluff, but I assure you, I don't even have an objective statement. It's all business.
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